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The Hospital Bed – Day 5

Stephanie over at ‘BeKindRewrite‘ is once again hosting ‘Voice Week’ – “Voice Week is an experimental writing challenge to help us stretch our versatility in voice and tone. Each Voice Week participant writes five versions of the same story – from five different points of view. Then, October 1 through 5, we post, compare, sharpen, and grow.”

Here is my 100 word story for Day 5 and my fifth voice.


The Hospital Bed

Look at them all, they can’t wait. I’m sorry to have to say this Jimmy but there’s a lot of people looking forward to your death. It’s a shame it had to be this way my love. I hadn’t planned for this to happen, well, not yet anyway. If only you hadn’t gone on about wanting a divorce. I’ve managed to convince the police it was an accident. That Chief Inspector has been such a sweetie. Well Jimmy, time to go, just one more act to play out, then the distraught wife becomes the rich, grieving widow.
“OK Doctor, you can do it now.”


17 thoughts on “The Hospital Bed – Day 5

  1. Mike, I love all your voices. Maybe we could team up together sometime? I just can’t say enough. How you basically tied everything together and gave us a complete story in just 5 days? I wasn’t able to do that, wasn’t even thinking that way. Now I feel like I cheated any one who read my stuff. There was no payoff with mine. OK, next year!


  2. I couldn’t believe even the doctor just wanted something from him. Poor Jimmy! Great ending – I love how you’ve tied it all together into a little murder story too. Great job!


  3. Ah! True love! A wife and her inheritance. Nice ending, and the Chief Insp, such a sweetie. Sucker for fluttery eyelashes more like!

    Great week, Mike. Thanks


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