I’ve just discovered that ‘Haiku Heights’ has set a challenge to write a haiku each day of April. A little late, but here goes. The prompt for today is ‘doubt’. The first two follow the 3-5-3 syllable format, the others the more traditional 5-7-5 syllabi format.
you promised
it would be OK -
didn’t you?unsteady
footsteps down the aisle -
big mistake~~~~~~~~~
the whispers of doubt
are quietened by his presence -
but they will returnthe look in her eyes
highlights his uncertainty -
seeds of doubt well sownhe stared at the gun
doubting her resolve to fire -
a foolish mistake
MikeJackson©2012
Mike…
Sorry, I laughed at the end of this…it is so goood !
I love your chain of thought when writing.
Peace
Siggi in Downeast Maine
No laughter here. I was blown away!
Cactus Did Not Doubt
Many thanks for your kind comments.
PS…the laugh, pardon me if my remark was offensive, was that I KNEW she’d shoot,
and one should never doubt someone would shoot a gun. Your ending was so perfect in my eyes.
I apologize if my comment was inappropriate…I got thinking about it and thought, OMg, what a thing for me to say.
Peace,
Siggi in Downeast Maine
Thank you for your comments Siggi and no apology needed.
I’m grateful that my writing might sometimes impact on people in different ways.
I am happy to see you at this challenge
This flowed like a story…a big mistake to doubt her ~
My share: http://everydayamazin.blogspot.ca/2012/04/doubts.html
Grace…
Happy to see you too…I looked for your name my first post.
I agree…it has a really nice flow…never doubt a woman who is pissed.
Peace,
Siggi in Downeast Maine
Glad to be here Grace.
Thanks for your comments.
Brilliant! Second and last were my favourites. Nicely done.
Many thanks.
Good to see you again, Mike … you are never too late to join in the fun!!
Great set — both of them — flowed like short stories!!
Forgot to show my link … This is my Day 4 ~~ Suspicion Erupts.
Thanks Becca.
It seems an age since I’ve written any haiku – looking forward to the rest of the month.
Nice chain of haiku. I am not so familiar with the 3-5-3 form, but I sure will try it in this challenge of Haiku heights.
At first I assumed all of them were stand-alone haiku, but added together what a powerful narrative–well done!
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